What Do You Think of These Story Line Ideas?

Question by Izzy: What do you think of these story line ideas?
The story line I’m about to describe for my teen drama story had different twists and turns involving different characters. The characters involved are main protagonist Deanna Santos, her half siblings Alex and Heather Barros, her younger sister Marissa Santos, Alex’s best friend Ricky Flynn, Ricky’s sister Kelley Flynn(also Deanna’s best friend), Tracy Flynn(mother of Ricky and Kelley), and Ivy Sheridan(Deanna’s big time rival).

1)Deanna/Ricky/Alex: Deanna and Ricky have been together on and off since freshman year. They have several things in common(i.e. they were both sexually abused by their fathers and they both possess manipulative and sensitive sides). They started off by having a love hate relationship. Ricky would always flirt with Deanna and make advances towards her but she rejected him each time. But Ricky didn’t give up there. When Ricky learns that Deanna was a victim of sexual abuse, him and Deanna bond more and grow closer to each other. Finally, Deanna decides to give Ricky a chance and they begin a relationship even though they know her brother Alex would not approve of their relationship. They lose their virginity together and she becomes pregnant with his child which ends up losing. It is around this time that Alex finds out about their relationship and is devastated by their betrayal but he gets over it long enough to help Deanna and Ricky cope with the loss of their child. Plus he forgives them. During sophomore year, Deanna keeps her distant from Ricky as she still feels gloomy over the loss of her baby and begins a promiscuous lifestyle as well as becoming addicted to coke and pills. Ricky and Alex are there to help Deanna kick her drug problem. Even though Ricky helped her, they don’t get back together just yet. Junior year is when all the drama happens. In the beginning, it starts off with Deanna and Alex being the same close siblings they’ve always been as well as Ricky and Alex still being friends. Deanna and Ricky begin bonding again over their “crazy history” and while they’re bonding, they realize that they still have feelings for each other. So they decide to give their relationship another shot and “keep it on the down low” for a while until they can figure out a way to tell Alex. This is where Deanna’s half sister comes into play. One day at school, she sees Deanna and Ricky making out in school and confronts her about it. Deanna begs Heather not tell Alex anything. But when Alex becomes suspicious that Heather may know something, she has no choice but to tell him the truth. Alex is once again angered by the betrayal of Deanna and Ricky and confronts them in an angrier way. Alex beats the crap out of Ricky while Deanna and Alex get into a screaming argument. Deanna is also angry with Heather and calls her a rat. Finally, Alex gives Deanna two days to break up with Ricky. Deanna doesn’t want to do it so she goes to Alex calmly and begs him not to make her break up with Ricky. It is here that Deanna reveals her true feelings for Ricky: that she loves him. Alex, still angered, gives Deanna an ultimatum: she either breaks up with Ricky and lives under a roof or she has a boyfriend and lives out in the street. Hurt, that Alex won’t accept their relationship, she forgives Heather and goes to her for help. A guilty Heather helps Deanna and Ricky run away together. They don’t move out of state. I’ll get to that later.
2)Alex/Kelley/Tracy: Kelley is Ricky’s sister and also Deanna’s best friend. She has a great relationship with her her mother Tracy and has always had a crush on Alex. Unlike Alex, Ricky would be OK with Kelley and Alex being together. Alex never really seemed to notice Kelley had a crush on him. Throughout the story, he is shown to have an interest for older women. When Alex and Kelley get paired up for a class project, Kelley is excited about getting to work with him as she sees it as a chance to finally reveal her feelings to Alex. While working on the project at her place, Tracy and Alex are secretly “exchanging glances”. Just when Kelley is about to tell Alex how she feels, Tracy tells Kelley to go step outside because they are “missing a couple of things in the house”. While Kelley is out, Tracy and Alex give into their tension and sleep together. Ricky, Kelley, and Deanna don’t find out about this right away. The affair between Alex and Tracy goes on for a while. I don’t know exactly how Deanna, Kelley, and Ricky will find out about the affair yet but let’s just say that when they do, things are going to get ugly. It is around this time when Heather is helping Deanna and Ricky stay together and when they decide to run away. Kelley confronts both her mother and Alex. She tells her mother that she never wants to see her again and decides to run away with Ricky and Deanna. Also Alex and Ricky get into another physical altercation. This will leave people wondering whether or not Kelley and Alex will become a couple.
3)Deanna/Ivy/Marissa/Alex: This is where

Best answer:

Answer by Yours Truly
There’s A LOT of stuff going on here. It seems like you had a lot of great ideas, and tried to combine them all together. While you have a good idea going for you, I think there’s a little too much going on at once. I think that you should try separating the stories, maybe by separating the years (Book 1 is Freshman, Book 2 is Sophomore, etc). I’m not sure how long you plan on spending each year but it seem like you could separate them a bit.
Also, is #2 a second idea, or part of the plot? I’m confused as to when this is going to happen- before of after Deanna and Ricky run away? Again, this seems like this could be another story by itself. I think that if you do try to combine all these plot lines together, the reader will get overwhelmed and confused. I’ve read books before where there is so much going on, I have to keep flipping back to remember what happened before; it gets frustrating when you can’t remember what was happening because the author wrapped you up in a second, amazing plot and then tries to bring you back to the first. While I am enjoying both plots, it would have been simpler and easier to give me two stories.

I think, in general, you have good ideas. I think if you took some info out or separated parts, it would be even better. Good luck!

Answer by David G
This sounds like a bad soap opera, I’m intrigued. Rarely can someone surprise me, this story did just that. It’s not my usual taste but if i had always read my usual taste, i would still be reading Dr. Seuss. You held my astonished attention. Well done. 8/10. Good job, keep writing.

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